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There were only a few signs at first:
Rumors on the streets,
sidelong glances and knowing looks,
specific questions and awkward conversations.

Then it became more obvious:
Outright accusations,
those close to me getting ready,
news from (un)verified sources.

The explosion came long after:
It shook the ground as ire spewed from our mouths,
sending people nearby running for cover.
Smoke billowed out from our ears and noses.

Words, like flaming comets raining to the ground,
littered down and burned both of us.
We hissed and seethed like bubbling water, burning anyone
that was unfortunate enough to be close to us.

The radioactivity alone was the silent killer,
the air too toxic to breathe in.
We were immune to the poison, since we were the source,
so we drank it in as it killed our lungs.

The fallout was shocking; nothing was spared.
Everything that remained was reduced to rubble and ashes.
We sat in silence for a while as we took this in.
There was no hope for an "us" anymore.

What came next was a nuclear winter.
Ashes cascaded down, like snow, like tears.
The whole world was nothing but grey and black,
with streamers of red and gold burning brightly.

Dead silent was the volume inside my head.
All I could see was grey and red and gold.
Everything tastes like dust and poison.
What had compelled us to launch this attack?

They said look for life among the dead.
Something good must have come out of the wreckage.
Everything living is twisted and mutated
from the radiation that seeped into this wasteland.

Until we spot a patch of blue among the grey above,
there will be no sunshine left in my head.
Until we find life that's living and whole,
this wasteland will remain a graveyard.
This was a long poem Sweating a little...  
I decided to compare a bad breakup to a nuclear explosion.
Enjoy :happybounce: 

Edit: oh wow I just noticed there was something missing in this poem. Now it's fixed XD

Edit #2: Oh. My. God. This got a Daily Deviation!! Thank you so much, everyone who viewed, commented, and favorited this poem!! And thank you doughboycafe for making this a DD!!! :D :love:
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WoundedWarriorG Featured By Owner May 10, 2018  New Deviant
Enjoy :happybounce: ???????????????
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:iconchaseawaythedark:
chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner May 10, 2018  Student Writer
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WoundedWarriorG Featured By Owner May 10, 2018  New Deviant
How can someone enjoy a nuclear winter????
Is this part of any science fiction story??????
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:iconchaseawaythedark:
chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner May 10, 2018  Student Writer
No lol
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killa1986 Featured By Owner May 9, 2018
This is what I call poetic injustice. Very well written.
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chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner May 9, 2018  Student Writer
Thank you!
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TheAnimalsRight Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2018  Hobbyist Digital Artist

10 out of 10 on the Geiger counter:D (Big Grin) 

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chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2018  Student Writer
Thank you :D
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Inspirationismusic Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
This is De-ja Vu. I used to work for a game company called Max Level Studios, The Game being developed? Terriful takes back the world.  One of it's level names I was responsible for making the background art for was titled Nuclear Winter. That is weird.

Shuddering and strange sensations aside, what a beautiful piece of literature you have brought forth here. Great work.
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chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2018  Student Writer
I've never heard of that game lol, so it wasn't on purpose. And thank you!
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Inspirationismusic Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
Cough Cough.

(The game hasnt even come out yet LOL)
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chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2018  Student Writer
Oh XD then it definitely wasn't on purpose!
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druid69 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2018
What an amazing idea and really well done!
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:iconchaseawaythedark:
chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2018  Student Writer
Thank you!
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druid69 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2018
You're welcome!
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JundShard Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2018
Nice poem, deserves the DD. Keep up the amazing work :)
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:iconchaseawaythedark:
chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2018  Student Writer
Thank you! :D
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Serendiipitii Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2018  Student General Artist
Excellent comparison, I loved this so much. Congrats on the DD, it is well deserved!
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chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2018  Student Writer
Thank you! :D
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LostGryphin Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Hobbyist Photographer
Congrats on the DD
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:iconchaseawaythedark:
chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2018  Student Writer
Thank you :D
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GameUniverso Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
You're comparing breakups with nuclear bombs?  That's a bit excessive.  But with girls around the world acting in similar ways, maybe popular dating is nuclear.
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chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2018  Student Writer
That is true XD and the idea occured to me one day, and it seemed fitting
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AutobotSwitchblade Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is a good way to word a bad breakup. Unique, creative, different (I mean that in a good way). ^^ Congrats on the daily deviation!
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chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2018  Student Writer
Thank you! :D
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AutobotSwitchblade Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2018  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
No probs! :squee:
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Catgirldstr11 Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018
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chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Student Writer
Thank you! :D
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salyssong Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
At least a breakup can't be caused by 99 baloons.
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chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Student Writer
That is true XD
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DeepDark00-0 Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Hobbyist Photographer
Incredible imagery.
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chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Student Writer
Thank you!
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BARNEY17666 Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018
Where's the jet at?
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:iconchaseawaythedark:
chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Student Writer
.... Not sure XD
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GRileyShiz Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Whoa. This is EPIC.
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chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Student Writer
Thank you :D
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MAGEBAD Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
This was beautiful 
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chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Student Writer
Thank you :D
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heartdialect Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Student Writer
what a novel comparison! congratulations on the DD. :heart:

i'm personally intrigued by the sense of disquiet you evoked in stanza 1 and 2. it makes sense that gossip abounds before a breakup, though i'm not quite sure if certain behaviour you've mentioned  "specific questions and awkward conversations", "Outright accusations"  would precede a nuclear explosion (assuming it's even one that has been foreshadowed).
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chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Student Writer
Thank you! :D
to be honest I forget what I meant by "specific questions and awkward conversations" and "outright accusations".... It's been a while ^^;
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heartdialect Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2018  Student Writer
You're very welcome and I understand that feeling. :lmao: 
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HorribleWriter Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
How come I didn't come across this sooner? It's great! ;) (Wink) 
The comparison is very fitting and understandable, yet unique and very well written.
The various stages are similar in both situations and the length is perfect, leaving us right at the end of all the events.
Beautiful. Clap 
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chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2018  Student Writer
Thank you! :D
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nosedivve Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2018   Writer
Interesting imagery and comparison! :)
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chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2018  Student Writer
Thank you! :D
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saevuswinds Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2017
Beautiful imagery! Congratulations on the feature :heart:
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chaseawaythedark Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2017  Student Writer
Thank you! :D
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